The chart shows how tourism to two countries changed over a 50 year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart shows how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts show the percentage of tourism in Australia and Germany visited by people over the world during five decades.

Overall, the percentage of European coming to Germany presented the highest. However, almost all figures for people visited Australia saw decreases except Asia ones.

In 1968, Australia received the great percentage visitors came from Europe, with the figure at more than half, but this figure took up a dramatic decrease at one in ten. Compared to Germany ones, European were more likely to visit Germany over the terms, becoming the largest percentage. However, the figure for people from Asia visiting Australia showed the lowest, but became the highest proportion after 50 years. Asian people coming to Germany made up a steeply increase, with the figure at a quarter.

The rate of visitors from USA coming to Australia accounted for 12%, being the lowest in the next period at a minority. However, American going to Germany occupied a minimal increase from 25% to 29%. The figure for Britain visited Australia represented a sharp decrease at a fifth in 2010, while the percentage of Britain to Germany experienced a dramatic decrease from 20% to a very small percentage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tage of tourism in Australia and Germany visited by people over the world during ...
^^
Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('steeply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
... Asian people coming to Germany made up a steeply increase, with the figure at a quarter. The r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15736040609 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57985903748 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543147208122 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3661308969 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 5.23603664747 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0356359554304 0.215688989381 17% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0183289096888 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292464622656 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333173244481 0.15604864568 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377074458967 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tage of tourism in Australia and Germany visited by people over the world during ...
^^
Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('steeply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
... Asian people coming to Germany made up a steeply increase, with the figure at a quarter. The r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15736040609 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57985903748 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543147208122 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3661308969 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 5.23603664747 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0356359554304 0.215688989381 17% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0183289096888 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292464622656 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333173244481 0.15604864568 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377074458967 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.