The chart shows the proportion of graduates from bluesky university in 2006 entiring different employment sectors

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The chart shows the proportion of graduates from bluesky university in 2006 entiring different employment sectors.

The givan pie chart dipects the information about the percentage of graduates from bluesky university in 2006 .

It can v seen the highest proportion of graduates entering service industry doblued as compare to the graduates show their interest in manufacturing industry .which was one third .whereas , the least percentage of who graduates from bluesky university entered sport and charity 0.1 to 0.3 . while , in 2006 there were 42℅graduates from bluesky university interest education .

Moving further , the percentage of who graduates from bluesky university show there interest in civil service and sicense and technology and arts / entertainment /media was in the rang of five to one in ten . however , the ratio of graduates choice to politics and government accounted to more then one in ten .while , the percentum of who graduates from bluesky university entered in other in 28 ℅ .

Overall , the line share of parcentage of graduates from bluesky university choice to service industry . whaeras the least ratio of who graduates from bluesky university show there interest in sport .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, then, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 923.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46153846154 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97889898638 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485207100592 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.0 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.1655156115 43.030603864 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.857142857 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 1.69756097561 1296% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4047391283 0.215688989381 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.246507387471 0.103423049105 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552099282631 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301143047607 0.15604864568 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408079032023 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 61.2550243902 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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