The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

The provided pie charts outline the proportion of workers employed in three different sectors in towns A and B from 1960 to 2010. Overall, the employment pattern in both towns underwent a significant shift over the given period, with a decrease in the manufacturing sector and an increase in the services field.
Upon analyzing the data in greater detail, in 1960, the majority of people in town B worked in the manufacturing sector, which was significantly higher than those in town A, with 41%. There were about 30% of the working population in town A employed in the sales and services sectors, compared to about 20% and 10% of those in town B.
By 2010, the services sector emerged as the dominant employer in town A, with a sharp rise to 64%, compared to a dramatic growth to 25% in town B. The manufacturing sectors in both towns A and B experienced significant decreases of nearly 20% to 53% and 20%, respectively, in their workforce.
By contrast, Town A recorded a slight drop to 16% in the number of people employed in sales-related jobs, compared to a minimal increase to 22% in town B

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...d 10% of those in town B. By 2010, the services sector emerged as the dominant employer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68041237113 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91347939866 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515463917526 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 18.3046776669 43.030603864 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.714285714 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.285714285714 5.23603664747 5% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411315717199 0.215688989381 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207955296397 0.103423049105 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822318651842 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2551853615 0.15604864568 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495117121091 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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