The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate information about except full-time job, the next destination of graduates and postgraduates in UK after they leave college in 2008. Overall a considerable number of those students chose to continue their study, while voluntary works were taken by a least number of them.
First of all, the number of graduates in UK were nearly ten times more than that in postgraduates in 2008. To be more specific, further study, favoured by most graduate students, was selected by 29,665 students as their next destination. About equal number of those students were part-time employed (17,735) or unemployed (16,235), while only 3,500 graduates took voluntary work after leaving school.
As for postgraduates, similar ratios can be viewed through the graph as further study remained the most popular choice (2,725). Those who sought part-time job also took the second place with the number of 2,535, which were slightly less than that of further study. This was followed by unemployed postgraduates standing at 1,625. A minimum amount students (345) would like to work as volunteers after postgraduation.
- The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 75
- The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 68
- Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What can be taken to protect them? 85
- The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house price in 1989.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariso 73
- The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 82
Comments
Essay evaluation report
The bar charts illustrate information about except full-time job, the next destination of graduates and postgraduates in UK after they leave college in 2008.
The bar charts illustrate the career paths of UK graduates and postgraduates who did not go into full-time work after they leave college in 2008.
First of all, the number of graduates in UK were nearly ten times more than that in postgraduates in 2008
First of all, the figures for graduates are approximately ten times higher than that of postgraduates in each category.
About equal number of those students were part-time employed (17,735) or unemployed (16,235)
part-time employed (17,735) or unemployed (16,235) has about equal number of those students
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flaws:
need more words/sentences varieties. compare how other users develop the first graph:
According to the first graph, the majority of graduates (29665) chose to engage in advanced studies, compared with 17735 students having part-time work and 16235 students still waiting for employment. Meanwhile, there were much less graduate students committing themselves to volunteering (3500), which took up an insignificant proportion of the data.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 176 200
No. of Characters: 913 1000
No. of Different Words: 111 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.642 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.188 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.75 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.924 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...dy, while voluntary works were taken by a least number of them. First of all, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, while, as for, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32386363636 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80849117421 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630681818182 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0185128065 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.111111111 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219246158471 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934611740207 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826700177148 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162534187665 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063952945325 0.0819641961636 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.