The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK

Essay topics:

The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK.

The given pie chart illustrates children learning musical instruments and the bar
chart displays the option of children about different musical instruments in two
years 1996 and 2016 in the UK.
Overall, the percentages of children who learned musical instruments in 1996
were less than 2016. In addition, the types of instruments such as keyboards in
2016 and piano in 1996 which were the most chosen by teenagers.
Looking at the pie chart for more details, the proportion of children who have not
learned a musical instrument makes up more than half, only the remaining 44%
are enrolled in the year 1996. Up to 2016, while the rate of teenagers learning a
musical instrument bounced dramatically to 76%, the ratio of those who did not
learn plunged significantly to around under a quarter.
With bar charts, pianos which were the most popular in 1996 went up to 30, but
after 20 years, the number of people dropped by a small number. Although in
1996 the ratio of people choosing keyboard instruments ranked second at 22,
followed by an enormous rise to the top at 30 in 2016. Besides, from 1996 to
2016, whereas the types of musical instruments chosen such as acoustic guitar,
violin and others were reduced by a noticeable number, the options of children
about electric guitar and more than one instrument climbed moderately.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The given pie chart illustrates children...
^^
Line 14, column 35, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to keyboard'
Suggestion: to keyboard
...h in 1996 the ratio of people choosing keyboard instruments ranked second at 22, follo...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, second, whereas, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02654867257 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65953866304 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535398230088 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0536372071 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 3.83414634146 469% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.479129451377 0.215688989381 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233707959778 0.103423049105 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158097253853 0.0843802449381 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156324492147 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10712101593 0.0819641961636 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The given pie chart illustrates children...
^^
Line 14, column 35, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to keyboard'
Suggestion: to keyboard
...h in 1996 the ratio of people choosing keyboard instruments ranked second at 22, follo...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, second, whereas, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02654867257 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65953866304 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535398230088 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0536372071 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 3.83414634146 469% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.479129451377 0.215688989381 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233707959778 0.103423049105 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158097253853 0.0843802449381 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156324492147 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10712101593 0.0819641961636 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.