The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by mrwen00 on Sun, 03/31/2019 - 10:29

The charts provide an analysis of the weight issues among the residents of the town of Charlestown in 1955 and in 2015.

In 1955, the youngest age group had the fewest number of weight issues, with more than 70% of 20-29-year-olds being assessed as having a healthy weight. In the same year, excess weight was only a significant problem among 40-49-year-olds, 20-30% of whom were classified as either overweight or obese. In fact, being underweight was a more significant problem affecting more than twenty percent of each age group, and the elderly in particular, with 40% of the over 60s being classified as underweight.

In stark contrast to this, in 2015, being underweight was only a problem among 20-29-year olds, with 20% obtaining this diagnosis, and the number of underweight elderly people had fallen to 10%. The charts clearly show that, in modern times, obesity poses a considerable problem from the age of 30 upwards. In fact, there was a steady increase in this problem in almost every age group over 29 until the age of 60, when the vast majority are considered to have an unhealthy weight. It is important to note that, by the age of 60, less than 50% of each age group was considered to have a perfect weight by the year 2015. This is a fall of 10% compared to the same age group in 1955.

When comparing the two years, it is clear that there has been a significant increase in the number of obese people in Charlestown, and there was a general drop in the number of underweight people between 1955 and 2015.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...assified as either overweight or obese. In fact, being underweight was a more sign...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...60s being classified as underweight. In stark contrast to this, in 2015, being ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, in fact, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 270.0 196.424390244 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68518518519 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71767319585 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.9 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 3.36585365854 327% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.9489710672 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110947984638 0.215688989381 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598571002971 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542520390056 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105752084163 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573629427166 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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