The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In this report, I'm going to describe a flow chart .

This chart depicts life cycle of enormous size fish known as Salmon .

According to the chart, cycle completed in three stages and whole process take place in aquatic.
Additionally, beginning with laying of eggs and ending up with adult fish moved back to upper river .

To begin with, adult salmon moved towards upper river, where water flows slowly and eggs are hatched there . By the presence of reeds and small stones, these eggs are protected very well .
These eggs are turned into baby fishes which is termed as fry, exactly 3-8 cm in length . In the next stage, these small fishes moved toward lower river, where water flow quickly. About 4 years , these fly turned into smolt with increase in size and length, ranging from 12-15cm . After this, they are moved toward open sea where they convert into adult fish in 5 years . At the end, these fishes move towards the same stage where they started .

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...le of enormous size fish known as Salmon . According to the chart, cycle com...
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...normous size fish known as Salmon . According to the chart, cycle completed ...
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...ith adult fish moved back to upper river . To begin with, adult salmon moved to...
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... flows slowly and eggs are hatched there . By the presence of reeds and small ston...
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...ones, these eggs are protected very well . These eggs are turned into baby fishes...
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... termed as fry, exactly 3-8 cm in length . In the next stage, these small fishes m...
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... where water flow quickly. About 4 years , these fly turned into smolt with increa...
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...in size and length, ranging from 12-15cm . After this, they are moved toward open ...
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... they convert into adult fish in 5 years . At the end, these fishes move towards t...
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...owards the same stage where they started .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, well, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 796.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79518072289 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.00167801507 2.65546596893 75% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638554216867 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 15.7768530103 43.030603864 37% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.3636363636 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0909090909 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09090909091 5.23603664747 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11575605512 0.215688989381 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052386375237 0.103423049105 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437225771036 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668438628994 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477192131192 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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