The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purpose.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Submitted by javad_70 on Thu, 10/11/2018 - 10:56

Left graph describe the process production of cement. Moreover right picture, summarize the manner of making concrete by cement.
Overall, it should be mentioned that, clay and lime stone are the main element of cement. And necessity cement for concrete is produced after 5 stages schematically.
Firstly, limestone and clay are crushed with each other by crusher, then, produced powder will be mixed after passing through mixer, and thirdly rotating heater is used to cook the uniform powder. In approach, cooked material should be grinded to name the cement. Finally, cement is packed in bags.
Gravel with 50% is the main substance for making concrete. In addition sand is the second important material with 25%. This material should be mixed in concrete mixer and water and cement also is added to them by 10% and 25% respectively. After an adequate mixing concrete will be prepared.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...cribe the process production of cement. Moreover right picture, summarize the manner of ...
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Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... main substance for making concrete. In addition sand is the second important material w...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed to them by 10% and 25% respectively. After an adequate mixing concrete will be pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, so, then, third, thirdly, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 145.0 196.424390244 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15862068966 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47010008196 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50165224831 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627586206897 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 226.8 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5576905482 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.0 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1818181818 22.9334400587 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249364412994 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104610461 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728268551525 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168866297379 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626789220319 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.76 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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