The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)Describe the information presented below, comparing results

Given bar chart depicts the information about average hours of diffrent activities per week done by both married men and women.
In genral, the changing hours of both categories are sligtly diffrent to each other. A married women without a child spends 30 hours per week to do free labour around the house.whereas, men spending only 19 hours per week.
This gap is increased when women have either 1 or 2 children. So they spend 20 hours more. whilst, married men spend less hours when they have either 1-2 children. they are spending only 18 hours on diffrent activities.
The number of hours spend by women increased contineously when the number of children increased. Women spend approximately 60 hours when she with more than 3 children. in contrast , married men spend contineously less hours that means close proximity to 15 hours when they have either 3 or more than three children
Overall, it can be seen that, women engaged more hours to complete unpaid works than those for men.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ek done by both married men and women. In genral, the changing hours of both ca...
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Suggestion: woman
...igtly diffrent to each other. A married women without a child spends 30 hours per wee...
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..., men spending only 19 hours per week. This gap is increased when women have ei...
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Suggestion: Whilst
... children. So they spend 20 hours more. whilst, married men spend less hours when they...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...0 hours more. whilst, married men spend less hours when they have either 1-2 children. the...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...0 hours more. whilst, married men spend less hours when they have either 1-2 childre...
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Suggestion: They
...urs when they have either 1-2 children. they are spending only 18 hours on diffrent ...
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... only 18 hours on diffrent activities. The number of hours spend by women incre...
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...urs when she with more than 3 children. in contrast , married men spend contineous...
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...e with more than 3 children. in contrast , married men spend contineously less hou...
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Line 4, column 215, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...ntrast , married men spend contineously less hours that means close proximity to 15 hours ...
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Line 4, column 215, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ntrast , married men spend contineously less hours that means close proximity to 15 ...
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Suggestion: proximity
...pend contineously less hours that means close proximity to 15 hours when they have either 3 or ...
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...ave either 3 or more than three children Overall, it can be seen that, women enga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, whereas, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 824.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87573964497 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54049555147 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585798816568 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.3666573086 43.030603864 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.23603664747 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125133019544 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563986808577 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508914136754 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095765764885 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052059248988 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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