The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city.Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar charts depicts comparative study regarding information on visits members to four different clubs in a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July.

Overall, the most notable point is that, the highest number of visitors noticed in the American Club in the month of June. However, Japanese Club was the only club which witnessed a least number of visitors in the month of January.

It is clearly seen from the graph that the number of visits to French Club had been almost constant in the first six months, amounting to around 60000, whereas in the month of July, they increased to almost 78000. The most regularity in number of visits was also seen in the case of British Club where, members’ visits again remained in the range of around 60000.

Japanese Club observed nearly 39000 visitors in January and that increased to about 47000 in April, but after that, the visits decreased and remained steady about 43000. Finally, the clear winner in terms of number of visitors was the American Club, with nearly 80000 visitors for the first four months, and then the numbers soared to nearly 97000 in June and settled at about 85000 in July.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July. Ove...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... Club was the only club which witnessed a least number of visitors in the month o...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1000.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87804878049 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25851024586 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531707317073 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.0550641401 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.857142857 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2857142857 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120901251546 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061653219922 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308528919962 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0781600113474 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274095558301 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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