The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same period.

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The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same period.

The lines graph illustrate how much money was spent by British parents very month on their children's sports and the number of children took part in football, athletics and swimming over the period 6 years, from 2008 to 2014.
Overall, it is clear that the amount of average money spent every months increased throughout the period shown. Turning to the participants graph, football was a sport had most participants joined in 6 years.
As can seen from the first chart, the average monthly amount spent on young children's sports by parents in Britain was risen significantly from 20 pound in 2008 to nearly 35 pound in 2014.
On the second chart, the number of children participated in football was highest with 7,5 million children. This number was continuous grown minimally to the end of the period. Similarly, children who joined in swimming rising gradually , started at under 2,5 million but ended at around 4 million. Athletics had the lowest number of participants at beginning. However, this figure was increased sharply , especially in 2014, reached its peak at 5 million children joined in. But it was a sight went down at the end.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'see' or 'be seen'?
Suggestion: see; be seen
...participants joined in 6 years. As can seen from the first chart, the average mont...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in 6 years. As can seen from the first chart, the average monthly amount spent ...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'pound' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'pounds'.
Suggestion: pounds
...Britain was risen significantly from 20 pound in 2008 to nearly 35 pound in 2014. On...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'pound' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'pounds'.
Suggestion: pounds
...ntly from 20 pound in 2008 to nearly 35 pound in 2014. On the second chart, the numb...
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Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... who joined in swimming rising gradually , started at under 2,5 million but ended ...
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Line 4, column 403, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...wever, this figure was increased sharply , especially in 2014, reached its peak at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, similarly

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 952.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95833333333 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62916917597 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598958333333 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4311706778 43.030603864 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338407560752 0.215688989381 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128798603407 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103485655623 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215450065017 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074048834211 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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