The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Submitted by nam4904 on Wed, 10/07/2020 - 02:45

The line graph below displays the consumption of 3 specific kind of food in China, namely meat, salt and fish from the year 1985 to 2010.
Overall, the number of food consumption fluctuated. After the period, the number of meat and fish consumption rose, while the figure for salt consumption dropped.
To be more specific, from 1985 to 1995, the consumption numbers of fish declined slowly into 610 grams for each person every week. After that, this figure grew steadily and reach the highest point at about 850. We can see that fish was consistently ranked first, which means it was the most consumed food in China.
Beside, the amount of salt was consumed in a week by Chinese fell dramatically from 490 into 200 grams and always placed second between the year 1985 and 2010. In contract, there was a significant increasing of meat consumption numbers. In 1985, it just hit a low of 100 grams, then grew up into 200 grams in 2010, the same number as salt. It was the least consumed food.

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'graphs'.
Suggestion: graphs
The line graph below displays the consumption of 3 spe...
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Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kinds'.
Suggestion: kinds
... displays the consumption of 3 specific kind of food in China, namely meat, salt and...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65909090909 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41176952286 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596590909091 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4080205304 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162508370499 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715054937984 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507344085314 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114976030133 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509241274454 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'graphs'.
Suggestion: graphs
The line graph below displays the consumption of 3 spe...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kinds'.
Suggestion: kinds
... displays the consumption of 3 specific kind of food in China, namely meat, salt and...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65909090909 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41176952286 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596590909091 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4080205304 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162508370499 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715054937984 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507344085314 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114976030133 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509241274454 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.