The graph below shows how people buy music

Essay topics:

The graph below shows how people buy music.

The given line chart illustrates the expenditure of people purchasing three types of listening to music.

At the first glance, there was a significant variance in the percentage of music methods. The sale of streams expressed an upward trend, while the data of all the methods decreased from the year 2011 to 2018.

As the obvious feature in the graph, the portion of streams rocket remarkably by over 40% in eight years. Moreover, in 2018 the method of streaming reached the most impressive number when comparing to another methods.

In contrast, people spend money on purchasing CDs as well as downloading music witnessed a noticeable plummet. From 2011 to 2018 the ratio of CDs purchased dropped significantly by approximately 30%. Although it reached a peak at under 60% in 2011, the number of purchasing CDs hit the lowest point in 2018. Follow the similar trend people downloaded music expressed a fluctuation in nearly one decade. The proportion of downloaded went up from over 30% to nearly a half in the first five years, whereas it decreased speedly in the years later.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2024-11-22 hahoaan 73 view
2024-11-20 Giang Tran 78 view
2024-11-16 hahoaan 84 view
2024-11-09 trinhthanh1 78 view
2024-11-07 hahoaan 73 view
Essays by user Đồng Nguyễn Yến Chi :

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in 2018 the method of streaming reached the most impressive number when comparin...
^^
Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it reached a peak at under 60% in 2011, the number of purchasing CDs hit the low...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, well, whereas, while, in contrast, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01657458564 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79161380898 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596685082873 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 14.7610975202 43.030603864 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.8 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118637494241 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514697843483 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560612286421 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743994477502 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373490394823 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in 2018 the method of streaming reached the most impressive number when comparin...
^^
Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it reached a peak at under 60% in 2011, the number of purchasing CDs hit the low...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, well, whereas, while, in contrast, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01657458564 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79161380898 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596685082873 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 14.7610975202 43.030603864 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.8 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118637494241 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514697843483 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560612286421 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743994477502 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373490394823 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.