The graph below shows the numbers of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011

The line graph compares three enquiries received by the Tourist Information office in one city over a period of six months in 2011.
It is clear that there were a significant change in the number of enquiries received by all three different ways shown on the graph. While person and telephone rose considerably over the 6-month period, the number of letter or email fell steadily
In January, the number of enquiries received in person was close to 800 and around 900 respectively. The following month, both telephone and letter or email fell approximately 100, but received in person rose by around 200
From February to Jun, as both person and telephone started to rise, letter or email began to fall. The number of received by telephone doubled to 800 and in person tripled to 1300. By contrast, received by letter or email fell by approximately 300 over the same 5-month period. By June, the number of enquiries received in person and by telephone had dramatically rose to 1900 and 1600, while the way of receiving by letter or email had fell to 400

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 365, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'risen'.
Suggestion: risen
...erson and by telephone had dramatically rose to 1900 and 1600, while the way of rece...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 876.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7868852459 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64154384581 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48087431694 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7454632535 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.142857143 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360693247305 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213357071765 0.103423049105 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.199553735203 0.0843802449381 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302598122469 0.15604864568 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.225476954963 0.0819641961636 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 40.7170731707 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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