The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015

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The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015.

The line chart shows information about the amount of people in one city taking part in live performances , which are divided into five age groups from 2010 to 2015.
Overall, the proportion of the youngest age group attended music concerts surpassed the figure for the 45-54 age group was the highest, while that of the elderly people was lowset.
In 2010, starting at 40% of people who attended music concerts were aged 16-24 and 25-44, while the rate of people belonging to the 45-54 age group was higher, at 52%. After that, the figure for the youngest age group exceeded that of the 45-54 age group in 2011, growing slowly to 70% in 2015. In addition, the proportion of people who were aged 25-44 slightly decreased by 10%, from 40% in 2010 to 30% in 2012 before peaking at around 49% at the end of the period.
The figure for the oldest group saw a steady increase of 12%, from 10% to 22% between 2010 and in 2011, continued to decline dramatically to 10% in 2012, and peaking at 22% again in 2015. Whereas, the rate of people aged 55-64 steadily fell by aproximately 3%, from 25% in 2010 to 22% in 2015, despite some small growths in between.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ne city taking part in live performances , which are divided into five age groups ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, whereas, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53846153846 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44579523539 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514423076923 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 19.6790575517 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7142857143 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378427224602 0.215688989381 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185505066983 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659157872179 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233389648753 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400347078864 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.88 61.2550243902 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ne city taking part in live performances , which are divided into five age groups ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, whereas, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53846153846 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44579523539 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514423076923 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 19.6790575517 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7142857143 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378427224602 0.215688989381 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185505066983 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659157872179 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233389648753 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400347078864 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.88 61.2550243902 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.