The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the U.K.

The graph shows changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

Generally it just has upward trend between 1996 and 2003 in each four domestic access technologies with different varieties.

The highest percentage of access is belonging to CD players. It began in sixty percent in 1996/97 then increased gradually and reached a peak in 2002/03.

Both home computers and internet access rose steadily in eight years but there is an obvious difference between these that is about the second one which did not have any domestic access until 1998/99.

Furthermore the access of mobile phones went up dramatically from almost twenty five percent in 1996/97 to approximately sixty five percent in 2002/03 although it fluctuated between 1998/99 and 2000/03 years.

Overall, as a result CD players are the most favorable domestic technology from 1996 until now in the UK’s homes and also more than half of the numbers of people in the UK use mobile phones as a modern technology.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
...the UK. Generally it just has upward trend between 1996 and 2003 in each four dome...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...technologies with different varieties. The highest percentage of access is belo...
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Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[3]
Message: The verb belong is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'belongs'
Suggestion: belongs
...s. The highest percentage of access is belonging to CD players. It began in sixty percen...
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Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...s. The highest percentage of access is belonging to CD players. It began in sixty percen...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ve any domestic access unit 1998/99. Furthermore the access of mobile phones went up dra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, then, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 857.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16265060241 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65353753154 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650602409639 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1545628242 43.030603864 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.428571429 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310592614543 0.215688989381 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177199489137 0.103423049105 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.220653539912 0.0843802449381 261% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196348562893 0.15604864568 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.229563886427 0.0819641961636 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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