The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Submitted by LadyJane on Thu, 06/17/2021 - 02:04

The line graph compares the percentage of elderly people in USA, Sweden, Japan over a course of 100 years, starting from 1940, including predictions through 2040.
Overall, it is evident that the proportion of people aged 65 or over in three countries all experienced an increase over the period shown, with the most dramatic rise taken place in Japan's figures.
In 1940, USA had the largest proportion of old people at around 9%, which was followed by Sweden and Japan at approximately 6 % and 5% respectively. Over the next 60 years, while Sweden and USA has witnessed a steady rise in figures to roughly 15%,the proportion of people older than 65 in Japan fluctuated with an overall downward trend, however, by 2000, it had recovered to its starting figure.
Despite remaining at a relatively low number, Japan is predicted to have nearly 27% of its population is elderly people in 2040, with an exponential growth of five times in only 40 years. The proportion of population aged 65 or over in USA and Sweden also continues their rising trend, with the former expected to increase more slowly than the latter, reaching a high of 23% and 25% in turn in 2040. It is clearly seen that USA had the lowest figure in the end despite having the largest proportion of aged population in 1940.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78571428571 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61687776466 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57619047619 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.1036834446 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.571428571 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 5.23603664747 14% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188592024445 0.215688989381 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996112835488 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327963035881 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124094485812 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033298417439 0.0819641961636 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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