the graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in someland from 1960 to 2000

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the graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in someland from 1960 to 2000

The line graph provided reveals the male and female smokers from 1960 to 2000 in some land. According to the data given over 40 years the number of male smokers dropped signification while the number of female smokers increased.
Since 1960, 600 male out of 1000 smoked and the female were less 100 out of 1000 in this year.over next 20 years,the number of male smokers declined steadily and reached to just over 400 out of 1000 people.On the contrary,the number of female smokers has a considerable increased and was always less than the male smokers.Until 2000,the male smokers have a steady dropped,besides the female smokers also fall slightly,and both stopped to got at around 200 in 1000 people.
In summary,male smokers were always higher than female smokers from 1960 to 2000 but the number of male smokers has a gradual dropped while the female smokers increased and the percentage of male and female smokers got almost same.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, while, in summary, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 781.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94303797468 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63565612777 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493670886076 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.815147379 43.030603864 341% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 195.25 112.824112599 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5 22.9334400587 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5 5.23603664747 296% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114325359358 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923753835574 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733567649175 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904079843549 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190839614601 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.2329268293 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.3012195122 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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