The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown

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The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

Given the two diagrams which compare employment in Republic of Freedonia by sex in two different years : 1975 and 1995. There are six job sectors included in the graphs.
At a single glance, in Freedonia in 1975, men surpassed women in all job segments. However, two decades later, the scenario altered seeingly and women’s works showed a remarkable effort.
According to the chart showing the detail in 1975, male went far ahead of women in manufacturing, finance, retail trade, non-defence and defence public sectors. Interestingly, the amount of women working in manufacturing field was by far half of that of male workers’. Referring to communication aspects, the number of female employees was 280,000, which was a close-knit to man whose number of workers was 300,000.
20 years later, there was an immerse change in the graph. Women showed outstanding advancement in these job sectors and outpaced male workers in communication and wholesale. They became almost equal number in banking jobs. The sex gap in defence sectors also dipped considerably at the end of the given period. Yet, manufacturing job and non-defence public sector remained unchanged over decades.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...was 300,000. 20 years later, there was an immerse change in the graph. Women showed outst...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30481283422 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94338844471 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604278074866 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3507237511 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5833333333 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 5.23603664747 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209124864546 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694747857397 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398036686799 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121936057873 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339555780361 0.0819641961636 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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