The increase in the number of obese person is costing so much money to the health care system.
The increase in the number of obese person is costing so much money to the health care system. It is argued that the most viable solution to this problem is to add more sport education classes to the school curriculum. This essay completely agrees with the statement because it brings awareness to the younger generation and their families.
To begin with, obesity is one of the dangerous disorders among the young and old people which puts more strain on the health care services. Educating the children about the physical activities will improve their health and will be more effective when added in the curriculum. Physical education will add enormous benefit to health of school children such as reduced weight, sugar and pressure levels and help them to be attentive in class. A similar initiative in Japan resulted in almost 60% reduction in obese rate across school children.
On the other hand, educating and involving school going children in physical education not only benefits the youngsters but also their family members. The children would educate about the dangers of being overweight and the cost involved to the health care system. This will directly help in the reduction of obesity among elderly people. A recent survey has predicted that the obese rate would decline when people are educated by their own family members.
To conclude, increase in the number of overweight people can be significantly reduced by adding physical education classes in school and this would result in resolving the health issue and reduced health care cost.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 965.302439024 136% => OK
No of words: 255.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14901960784 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47318257809 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521568627451 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 283.868780488 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9487720337 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.416666667 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301346162108 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147057230754 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.267056751481 0.0843802449381 316% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211480190123 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120175853854 0.0819641961636 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.