In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Vaccination for flu was tried on the women of a large town in the countryside in the month of June during the year 1996 on an experimental basis. The bar chart indicates deaths from flu of the natives from March to August. The pie chart illustrates the percentage of females who are at a maximum risk, out of those who were given vaccination. The lines on the third graph depict the number of death cases filed based on gender for a period of 11 months from February to December.

To begin with, the death of only one female from flu was reported before the experiment was conducted. This rose to a maximum of four during two months after June. As compared to this, only two males died during this period from June to August as a result of this epidemic.

Secondly, the pie chart shows that the vaccine was given to only the females who were at a maximum risk from the disease, out of which 28% refrained from taking part in the trial. Women who were senior citizens formed the largest group at 35% of those who took the vaccine and the smallest was formed by the ones who were hospitalized at a mere 13% of the total. Additionally, 24% were babies or children from those who were involved in the experiment.

From the line graph, it can be observed that the number of female deaths increased to 1000 in March and reached its peak in June with as many as 3500 women dying from the disease. After that, the death rate decreased and levelled to 2500 for the rest of the year. The figures for males show a similar trend, but at a lower value than that of their female counterparts.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, secondly, third, as for, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 965.302439024 135% => OK
No of words: 293.0 196.424390244 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43344709898 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3316700759 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 106.607317073 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511945392491 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 402.3 283.868780488 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4718085301 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9230769231 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.13902439024 702% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141505643525 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598999724886 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783211358758 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916985744263 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428642779951 0.0819641961636 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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