The line charts give information about the demand for steel and the number of workers employed in a country from January to December Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The line charts give information about the demand for steel and the number of workers employed in a country from January to December.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by npoppp2 on Fri, 09/11/2020 - 10:02

The line charts below provide news about the demand for steel and the amount of workers employed in a country from January until December.

To start with, in the first 4 months it can be seen that steel that have been produced climbed slightly to 5000 million tonnes and then slips back again to 4000 million to just remain steady until August. On the other hand, total of workers reached its peak ( approximately 5500 thousands) in February and plummeted really hard to 3000 thousands in March, after that the graph shows several fluctuations until August. In addition, the actual requirement fluctuated consistently from 2000 millions in January and went back to 2000 millions again in August.

Furthermore. In the last 4 months the graph we can saw that the percentage of steel rose gradually and reached the same amount as February ( 5000 million), moreover, it decreased sharply until reached approximately 900 millions in December. The graph also provides the same trends as number of employee that had several decrement until reached 1000 thousands in December. Lastly, the actual need had dropped sharply until reached the lowest peak (0 millions) luckily, it climbed again and had interception point with the amount of produced.

Overall, the number of workers employed always decreased, while, the number produced and actual demand intercepting each other at the end.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... hand, total of workers reached its peak approximately 5500 thousands in February...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ck to 2000 millions again in August. Furthermore. In the last 4 months the graph we can ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and reached the same amount as February 5000 million, moreover, it decreased sha...
^^
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decrement seems to be countable; consider using: 'several decrements'.
Suggestion: several decrements
...e trends as number of employee that had several decrement until reached 1000 thousands in Decembe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, lastly, moreover, really, so, then, while, in addition, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1156.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18385650224 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57203719536 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533632286996 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.2560339806 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 112.824112599 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.25 5.23603664747 272% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131901181257 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767634642689 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111048257191 0.0843802449381 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13670208844 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131595795417 0.0819641961636 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... hand, total of workers reached its peak approximately 5500 thousands in February...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ck to 2000 millions again in August. Furthermore. In the last 4 months the graph we can ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and reached the same amount as February 5000 million, moreover, it decreased sha...
^^
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decrement seems to be countable; consider using: 'several decrements'.
Suggestion: several decrements
...e trends as number of employee that had several decrement until reached 1000 thousands in Decembe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, lastly, moreover, really, so, then, while, in addition, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1156.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18385650224 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57203719536 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533632286996 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.2560339806 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 112.824112599 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.25 5.23603664747 272% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131901181257 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767634642689 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111048257191 0.0843802449381 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13670208844 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131595795417 0.0819641961636 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.