The pie graphs shows the result of a survey of children activities the first graph shows the culture and leisure activities that boy participate in whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate

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The pie graphs shows the result of a survey of children activities the first graph shows the culture and leisure activities that boy participate in whereas the second graph shows the activities in which girls participate

The two pie charts depict the proportion of both sexes children who did cultural and leisure activities.
Overall, it can be manifested that boys more interested in sports games in the majority more time spend with computer games and girls more interested in outdoor and indoor activities but more likely dancing.
Firstly, the highest participation of boys in cultural and leisure activities for computer Games34percentage (one-third) and whereas girls almost half of it only the (16 percent)in addition to both genders participation in listings music for the similar percentage(one-ten) moreover girls participate reading proportion 10 times more as per boys least one ten percentage(21percent)
Secondly, girls' highest participation in dancing 27 percent and also some activates netball and gymnastics which are 11percentage and 15 percent respectively
Moreover, the second hiegst participate for boys in basketball which just over a quarter furthermore boys plays 17 percent soccer in the second 6 percent less played skateboarding.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...cipate reading proportion 10 times more as per boys least one ten percentage21perc...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'boys the least'.
Suggestion: boys the least
...reading proportion 10 times more as per boys least one ten percentage21percent Secondly, ...
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Line 4, column 11, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'girls the highest'.
Suggestion: girls the highest
... one ten percentage21percent Secondly, girls highest participation in dancing 27 percent and...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...11percentage and 15 percent respectively Moreover, the second hiegst participate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, whereas, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 33.7804878049 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71428571429 4.92477711251 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39828218488 2.65546596893 128% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649350649351 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 22.4926829268 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 267.081760266 43.030603864 621% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 293.333333333 112.824112599 260% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.3333333333 22.9334400587 224% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 34.3333333333 5.23603664747 656% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24776514546 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133963099578 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076627276337 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123259629318 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455189636699 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.1 13.2329268293 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 61.2550243902 18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.51609756098 262% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 10.3012195122 237% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.73 11.4140731707 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.57 8.06136585366 131% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.4329268293 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.9970731707 204% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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