Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples
We are living in a technology-driven world where smartphones have become AN indispensable part of our life. This is the reason why there has been a significant increase in the amount of time children spend on their phones. While some people may argue that this is a natural result of the conviniences these devices afford, i firmly believe that this phenomenon is creating detrimental health outcomes for children.
One of the major for the high smartphones usage among children is that parents view it as a great solution. Nowadays, many parents find themselves overwhemled and exhausted after a hard working day, and smartphones is one of the easiest methods to keep their children occupied. It is a common occurence to see children keep their eyes glued to their screen at restaurants, airpots or coffee shops, while their parents attend to other matters. Another reason for children’s excessive use of smartphones is the availability of entertainment options. Children can easily donwload games, music, movies on their phones and then spending several hours to playing, listening or watching. This can be highly negative because it will take away the time that children should spend on other activities such as doing homework, playing sports, socializing with friends.
Considering the effects of this trend, we can say that it is a negative development. First of all, the overuse of smartphones greatly impairs children mental and physical health. Children spending hours on smartphones daily are more likely to experienced anxiety, depression and loneliness. Social media platforms, such as Facebook, Instagram, Tiktok, can contribute to this by exposing children to cyberbullying comments. Futhermore, the blue light emitted by the screens can harm children’s eyesight, which is pảticularly damaging to developing eyes, can lead to sedentary lifestyle, which has long-term consequences for physicsl fitnss.
In conclusion, the current phenomenon of children spending long hours scrolling their smartphones is extremely concerning. Even if there were any possible benefits, they would be far outweighed by the negative impacts these devices have on children’s physical and mental growth. Therefore, parents and educators need to take more active role in regulating children’s smartphone use to promote healthier lifestyle and ensure the weLL-being of the next generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 5.60731707317 535% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 965.302439024 210% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 365.0 196.424390244 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55068493151 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0792375492 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 106.607317073 204% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597260273973 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 283.868780488 213% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0895866215 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.176470588 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318635705581 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103861536297 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499859757689 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193204289861 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403799547659 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 11.4140731707 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 40.7170731707 265% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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