It is argued by some people that zoos are cruel and animals should not live in zoos. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this notion and my opinion will be discussed in further paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why people believe this statement. The first reason is that animals are not free. Since they often live in a certain place, just under 10 m2, and are banned to go outside this area. It is not fair with the animals, they can feel upset and their characteristic wild may be disappeared. According to a study, about 10% of animals living in zoos are in depressed status, which leading to some bad behavior with visitors. Furthermore, animals in zoos face up with overwork, they must perform some funny activities in order to get food or money from tourists. The owners of zoos want to increase their profit from animals, consequently, they have to work 10-12 hours per day.
Explaining some of supporting points in against this statement, it is true that zoos play an important role in the conservation of animals. Firstly, zoos create a safe environment for animals to live, especially with wild species. If wild animals live in a natural environment, they will be caught even will be killed by human as the price of them brings much profit. As a result, some certain species become extinct, or reduce in the numbers of the population. In addition, zoos also provide food, and healthcare services to animals, which could help them to live longer, and rise the total population in some species. For example, a research showed that zoos contribute to preservation 5% kinds of bird escaping extinction.
In conclusion, although some people believe zoos should be closed, I believe that aforementioned points are strongly supporting my viewpoint.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wed that zoos contribute to preservation 5% kinds of bird escaping extinction. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 5.60731707317 464% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 965.302439024 155% => OK
No of words: 306.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90522875817 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72996333607 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 106.607317073 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575163398693 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 283.868780488 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9071790391 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8125 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 5.23603664747 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307348702107 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101946902735 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700658804337 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217625513056 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512067745808 0.0819641961636 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 40.7170731707 179% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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