The table given illustrate the time spend by different age group doing various activities per year in Someland.
It is not surprising that most of the leisure time used is watching TV and videos. Younger and older people use most of their time watching TV while the middle age group spend an average amount of time of Television as shown in the table. On one hand, teenager and old are less likely to be accompanied by 4 or less people while from 20+ to 60 are more likely to socialize as compared to them. On other hand, when it comes to socializing with 4 more people the table shows a decreasing number from teen to 70s. This show that older people interact with less people and younger with more people. When it comes to doing individual exercise teenager are more enthusiastic for exercise and older do exercise to keep themselves fit, while the people of 50s and 60s show less importance to individual exercise, Same is the case, when it comes to doing exercise in group. However, older prefer less doing exercise in group but the younger prefer more doing exercise in group as compared to doing exercise individually. Everybody likes going to movie theatre, especially the teenager and older, but is not the case in the middle age due to lack of leisure time due to work load and managing other parts of life.
Both exercise and cinema shows that people tend to spend less time on this things as the age passes by.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e less likely to be accompanied by 4 or less people while from 20+ to 60 are more li...
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Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...is show that older people interact with less people and younger with more people. Wh...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... that people tend to spend less time on this things as the age passes by.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1171.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 255.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59215686275 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3718521096 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 378.0 283.868780488 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9332921302 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.1 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151518370645 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787923871759 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451150443327 0.0843802449381 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135569781348 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195100368763 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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