The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the two pie charts demonstrated how online shopping sales contributed for various retail sectors in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010.

Overall, it has been clearly seen that contribution of different segment were not same in those years. At the begging of the period, Electronics and appliance was the biggest performing sector than others, while video games was the least significant sector in online retail selling. However, at the end of the period food and beverage selling through online took the largest segment in chart, whereas smallest segment was replaced by home and furniture sales.

In 2005, Food and beverage accounted for 22% of online sales and experienced double increase in comparison to time became 32% in 2010.That change was the most mark-able shuffled among the charts and became the highest selling part in 2010 . Also Canadian slightly increased their eager to buying video games using internet over the period of time and became 23% from 18%.

On the other hand, retail e-shopping sales faced decreasing trend in electronics and appliance sector as well as home and appliance sector. In 2005, Electronics and appliance was 35%,the highest sales area for online retail sales and Home and Appliance was the quarter of pie chart. Both sectors together achieved more than half of whole sales by 2005. But after 5 year
both segments fall down respectively 35% to 30% and 25% to 15%. Apparently, peoples choice towards home and appliance products decreased more than others.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, so, well, whereas, while, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 6.8 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 244.0 196.424390244 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16803278689 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50063215664 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 106.607317073 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590163934426 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 367.2 283.868780488 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3350987138 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.636363636 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1818181818 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263592867391 0.215688989381 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106995301836 0.103423049105 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123112809786 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170322293529 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148230364769 0.0819641961636 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.2329268293 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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