Writing Task1 Cambridge10 Test1 (Pie chart)

The pie chart compares Australia household energy use with green gas emissions of six different household energy devices.
Overall, a major proportion of energy using for heating purposes, while the least amount of energy use for cooling devices.And regarding gas emissions heating devices produce the largest amount of gas emission and cooling devices produce the least green gas emissions.
The energy need for heating purposes contributes approximately a third of the total energy. 30% for the water heating and 42% for heating. Other appliances account for 15% of the total energy. For refrigeration, lighting and cooling percentages are 7%,4% and 2% respectively.
The gas emissions from water heater and cooling shows almost similar figure of its energy use 30% and 3%. However all the other devices gas emissions increase or decrease comparing to energy use. The gas emitting from heating devices is less than a half comparing to its energy use only 15%. The figure for gas emissions from refrigeration and lighting double than its energy use .Finally, the proportion of other appliances gas emission almost double than its energy use.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ix different household energy devices. Overall, a major proportion of energy us...
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...mount of energy use for cooling devices.And regarding gas emissions heating devic...
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...gy use for cooling devices.And regarding gas emissions heating devices produce ...
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...ing devices.And regarding gas emissions heating devices produce the largest amo...
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... gas emissions heating devices produce the largest amount of gas emission and ...
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... the largest amount of gas emission and cooling devices produce the least green ...
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...produce the least green gas emissions. The energy need for heating purposes con...
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...ar figure of its energy use 30% and 3%. However all the other devices gas emissions inc...
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... and lighting double than its energy use .Finally, the proportion of other applian...
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...nd lighting double than its energy use .Finally, the proportion of other appliances gas...
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...ion almost double than its energy use.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, regarding, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 33.7804878049 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 969.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35359116022 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70449748476 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46408839779 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 305.1 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5062201678 43.030603864 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0189086460986 0.215688989381 9% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0103715511333 0.103423049105 10% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311146533999 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0259288778333 0.15604864568 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449101337905 0.0819641961636 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 61.2550243902 73% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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