09.10.2017You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw.Write a letter to the company.In your letter,Introduce your self.explain the situation.say what action you would like to company to take.

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09.10.2017
You have bought a new laptop computer and in a few days of purchase discovered a major flaw.Write a letter to the company.In your letter,
Introduce your self.
explain the situation.
say what action you would like to company to take.

Dear Sir,
My name is Saad Mubarak and I am writing in regards to report a technical issue which I have discovered within a few days of purchasing a new laptop from your electronic store. let me explain in detail.

To elucidate I had purchased an Apple MacBook last week from your store at Crescent drive. Though I have been extremely satisfied with the purchases I made for electronic items from your store in the past but this is first time I am facing a technical issue with the laptop. The issue is with the laptop battery getting discharged quickly ever after prolonged hours of charging. Although I tried to troubleshoot on my own and restarted the laptop several times it didn’t resolve the issue. Since I work from home and most of the times I need a laptop to send reports to office thus considering the present situation my work is getting affected.

let me additionally inform you I had called your technical support engineer yesterday who spent hours troubleshooting this issue without providing any concrete resolution. Hence I am running out of patience, therefore,<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="patience "></span> I would request you to kindly provide a replacement of this laptop to ensure speedy resolution.
I look forward to your immediate response
Yours sincerely
saad

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, My name is Saad Mubarak and I am writing...
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Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...y name is Saad Mubarak and I am writing in regards to report a technical issue which I have d...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Let
... new laptop from your electronic store. let me explain in detail. To elucidate I...
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Line 4, column 651, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... situation my work is getting affected. let me additionally inform you I had cal...
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Suggestion: Let
...ation my work is getting affected. let me additionally inform you I had called...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...hout providing any concrete resolution. Hence I am running out of patience, therefore...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ... I am running out of patience, therefore, ^^
Line 7, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... look forward to your immediate response Yours sincerely saad
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Line 8, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our immediate response Yours sincerely saad
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, look, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1116.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19069767442 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.64729464778 2.54303337028 143% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627906976744 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.86959478 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6 76.5299724578 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164068715017 0.216113520407 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665605569122 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477514037074 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106335509597 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499400364335 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 8.71597938144 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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