During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter:

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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter:

- remind him when and where you met

- tell him what kind of job you are interested in

- say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr. Fitch,

I am writing in response to our conversation earlier about a potential vacancy in your new Italian lounge.

As you may remember, we met in the aircraft when we were travelling from Sydney to Toronto 3 days ago on 5th August 2019. We sat next to each other in the business class but we only started chatting when the airplane almost crashed with an eagle in the air.

I am excited to try the interior designer role of your new Italian lounge in Toronto, from drafting the floor plan to selecting furniture and materials. I can also advise your procurement team on the items to purchase for your new store, including utensils and art pieces.

I believe I am capable to take up the role. I have spent 5 years in ABC Design Inc., the global design service company, and I am specialized in designing concept stores and food chains. Also, I was one of the members of the design team for the successful Italian ABC Company project in New York.

I look forward to hearing from you soon!

Yours sincerely,

Eliz Smith

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...including utensils and art pieces. I believe I am capable to take up the rol...
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Line 17, column 45, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lieve I am capable to take up the role. I have spent 5 years in ABC Design Inc., ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68817204301 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48264294924 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661290322581 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 261.9 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.3903658897 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8888888889 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 4.34317383033 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0801877868812 0.216113520407 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337372751734 0.0766984524023 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299022041869 0.0603063233224 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0489310533434 0.12726935374 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292060789794 0.0580467560999 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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