A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you but you can’t do so.•Tell her the reasons for that•Apologize to her•Make alternative arrangements

Dear Coco,

Sorry to tell you that you cannot stay with me in July during your visit to China from Australia, because I recently decide to apply a working holiday visa to New Zealand. Please accept my sincerely apology.

Due to the reason that I urgently need to improve my spoken English, I will apply the next working holiday visa in June 23. I have to practice my oral English in a English-spoken country, like New Zealand. I guess I will be in New Zealand when you arrive in China.

However, you can live in my house if you travel in China as planed. I will leave my keys in my mailbox. You can still live in my home. Besides, I can inquest a friend of mine to keep you company. He can be helpful with your travel in China. Inconveniences caused are greatly regreted. Please tell me your latest plan, I can make a new arrangement for you.

Yours sincerely

Jim

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: IN_JANUARY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'on June'? This seems to be a day date.
Suggestion: on June
...ill apply the next working holiday visa in June 23. I have to practice my oral English ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... I have to practice my oral English in a English-spoken country, like New Zealan...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, still, i guess

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 0.0 5.05154639175 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 720.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44444444444 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47776270702 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586419753086 0.622605031667 94% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8926001535 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 55.3846153846 76.5299724578 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4615384615 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07692307692 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259754748765 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949126202425 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921020253613 0.0603063233224 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171872832882 0.12726935374 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886912852933 0.0580467560999 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 8.37731958763 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.58 8.71597938144 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.