The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent do you agree?
The increase of obesity among human population has become a concern for all society. Som individuals are of the opinion that the best approaches to manage this issue is to add more sport courses in school program. I personally agree with this idea and extend my reasons in the following.
To begin with, pupils can academically learn about the benefits of exercising for their well-being. As a matter of fact, teachers are enough educated to explain how physical activities can be effective in preventing of overweight and diseases and undoubtedly most of students follow their teachers advises. Furthermore, students learn to make a balance between working and exercising in the future. As a matter of fact, when sport education lesson is introduced in school curriculum, students would understand how exercising can be mattered as other lessons such as science, biology and mathematics are. Therefore, they try to spend enough time for physical activity on side their work.
Although the academic lessons can encourage students to do more exercising, they should also learn to have a healthy nutrition. Unfortunately, today, most of children would like to eat fast food and snack. However, specialists warned that this sort of packages food can increase the risk of detorious illnesses such as obesity, cardiovascular diseases and diabetes and high blood pressure. Therefore, academic lessons about healthy diet can increase the awareness of students in this area.
To conclude, in my opinion, in the school curriculum, both of neutrinos and sport lessons should be introduced. In this way, students will learn to start exercising and eating more heathy food .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, so, therefore, well, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 32.9175257732 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 26.3917525773 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 937.175257732 150% => OK
No of words: 264.0 206.0 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31439393939 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88490504338 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 290.88556701 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0612395094 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.214285714 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 4.34317383033 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15604829992 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537185416839 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400562267117 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100890249505 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239911648181 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 70.7449484536 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 8.71597938144 155% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 41.2886597938 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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