A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the

Dear Sir/Madam,

First of all, we as residents of Lajpat would like to extend our gratitude towards your generosity for us. Activities which you have choosen to sponsor are both welcomed by the general public and i will share the details of benefits that will come with both of them through this letter.

Sponsoring the local sports team will boost confidence of these young children. Proper coaching and an enhanced infrastructure will ensure more participation from the locals, and it will benefit their game for the future.

Music is always a great way for many people a way of relaxing and enjoyment. Hosting such a even in our community not only bring people a joyful escape from their daily chores along with that it can also attracts people from other regions which will benefit local business.

According to my suggestion i would like to a have a concert as it will give us all some cherished memories and unforgettable night where everyone can enjoy with their friend and families leaving all their troubles behind for one night.

Thanks in Advance!!!

Your's Faithfully
Gunjan

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...sen to sponsor are both welcomed by the general public and i will share the details of benefit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...both welcomed by the general public and i will share the details of benefits that...
^
Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...of relaxing and enjoyment. Hosting such a even in our community not only bring pe...
^
Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'attract'
Suggestion: attract
...aily chores along with that it can also attracts people from other regions which will be...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 28, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...business. According to my suggestion i would like to a have a concert as it wi...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 923.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04371584699 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55671141681 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.688524590164 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2156791598 44.8134815571 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.375 76.5299724578 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 16.8248392259 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156011246488 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715810892509 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335040280671 0.0603063233224 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748007067715 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510534591244 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 8.71597938144 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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