Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself.

Essay topics:

Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself.

Dear Mr HI,

I come to Hamilton College from Singapore where I was a student for 10 years. I have studied Computer, Physic, Mathematic and some background about History, Geographic, and Society in English. My best grade is about Computer, it was Grade A.

When I was in Singapore, I had a part-time job in a restaurant which owned by my uncle. I worked 1 hour a day as a waitress, it help me to gain general knowledge about business, which I chose as a major in Hamilton College.

In free time, I often went to piano club, where I had taken part since I was 6 years old. It was always wonderful place for me to refresh my mind. I, sometimes, went to cinema at the weekend to enjoy the latest movie of Marvel as I am a big fan of it.

I do not often go abroad; I have come to Thailand once. This is the first time I come to Europe and I find that England is a beautiful country with the best education system. I hope I will earn the qualification and gain more knowledge about business field when I am in Hamilton College.

This is the brief description of my background.
Best wishes,

Marina

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...I worked 1 hour a day as a waitress, it help me to gain general knowledge about busi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 905.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33014354067 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63483921574 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593301435407 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8867520673 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.6153846154 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0769230769 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92307692308 4.34317383033 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0504555445733 0.216113520407 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0192922344189 0.0766984524023 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0203138635114 0.0603063233224 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0217178268352 0.12726935374 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177585078857 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.54 8.71597938144 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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