Mrs Barrett an English speaking woman who lives in your town has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer Write a letter to Mrs Barrett In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would lik

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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.
Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter:
• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I am writing this letter in reference to an advertisement that I saw in today's newspaper. I am offering my services for the role of helper in your house.
I am a student of IT in University of Lahore, so if I can be helpful if there is anything related to IT. I have great writing skills of English and Urdu that could be used to assist you in any writing tasks. Moreover, I am a very good cool of traditional dishes because I am usually cooking for myself for 7-8 years now. I can help in cooking dishes like chicken, beef, fish in a local way.

I am willing for this work because I will be free from studies during this summer and I am planning to have a job during this time. A job will certainly support in financially to afford in next semester fees. This job suits me more because your house is quite near to my place of living.
I will be available from the start of June till the end of August. I have a hobby of playing football, so I must say that I am occupied fully on every sunday because this is reserved for my sports day.

Kindly inform me about your decision

Yours sincerely,
Bilal Ahmed

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...for the role of helper in your house. I am a student of IT in University of Lah...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ful if there is anything related to IT. I have great writing skills of English an...
^
Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a local way" with adverb for "local"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cooking dishes like chicken, beef, fish in a local way. I am willing for this work because...
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Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Kindly inform me about your decision Yours sincerely, Bilal Ahmed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 217.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25806451613 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42174558199 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585253456221 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 295.2 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5372449327 44.8134815571 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 4.34317383033 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162490881211 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612730743833 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459740137893 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785913835911 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378488545263 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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