A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntaryl unpaid work You would like to do some voluntaryl unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntrylunpaid work In your letter explain why you

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to submit my request for the part-time volunteer as tour guide in your history museum this summer.

My name is San Zhang, majoring in history in XX normal university. As requried by my tutor, I need to do social work in my hometown for free during my vacation. Besides, I have been in favor of Chinese history since my childhood, which is a main reason why I continued to study in this field now. Every semester, the history group I established in my campus would organize an conference to invite both students and professors to give speehes about their historical research. We would like more people to know the stories of our ancestors.

Moreover, I often went to your history museum since I was young, especially after the time you canceled the ticket which was a significant progress. as a resident of our community, it is my honor to contribute my work to the popular museum where I live at my best.

Please have a look at my CV in the attachment, I can serve as guide from June to the end of July. Thank you for your consideration, I am eagerly looking forward your reply.

Sincerely,
San Zhang

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...established in my campus would organize an conference to invite both students and ...
^^
Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'significant progress'.
Suggestion: significant progress
... time you canceled the ticket which was a significant progress. as a resident of our community, it is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...icket which was a significant progress. as a resident of our community, it is my h...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, moreover, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59134615385 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67822121901 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8000717008 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8181818182 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230111756175 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799215902625 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703477506323 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155571081003 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465974364304 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...established in my campus would organize an conference to invite both students and ...
^^
Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'significant progress'.
Suggestion: significant progress
... time you canceled the ticket which was a significant progress. as a resident of our community, it is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...icket which was a significant progress. as a resident of our community, it is my h...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, look, moreover, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59134615385 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67822121901 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8000717008 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8181818182 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230111756175 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799215902625 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703477506323 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155571081003 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465974364304 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.