At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
There are many factors contributing to the development of the country, and one of them which plays a vital role is the population. In various nations, young adults share a considerable proportion in their population, far higher than that of the elderly. Even though this trend may bring some problems requiring proper solutions, I believe the benefits are far more superior and will exert a positive impact on the status of those countries.
To begin with, a huge number of young adults may bring some problematic issues which need to be appropriately tackled. First and foremost, due to their lack of experience, they may not be able to perform tasks in their specific job with as high efficiency as the older generation can, leading to a deficit in terms of economic values. In simpler terms, products created by a young workforce are unlikely to be delicate and their quality may not meet the increasing demands of the international market. What is more, since young adults tend to follow a modern and vibrant lifestyle, they do not take traditional and cultural values for granted, and this could somewhat result in the loss of our unique identity which has been shaped over the past thousands of years.
On the other hand, there are many irreplaceable plus points that can only be created by younger people. Their endless creativity and innovative ideas are crucial parts of this increasingly developing world, as the young always try to break through their own limits to reach impossible things that we never dreamed of in the past. An obvious illustration of this is the invention of AI, which may be responsible for many important tasks in the near future. Additionally, their energetic and dynamic spirit will compensate for the lack of experience, judging by the fact that they will continuously learn from their mistakes and better themselves every day. Furthermore, governments can also cut down on the amount of investment on healthcare services, as more young adults mean that they don't put such a huge strain on medical facilities.
To sum up, even though there are both pros and cons to the situation, my viewpoint is that the advantages will totally outweigh the disadvantages. Young people will be the pioneers in all aspects of life, and together they will change the world into something that we have never seen before.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, to begin with, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.48453608247 227% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 4.92783505155 325% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.03092783505 363% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 26.3917525773 227% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 937.175257732 209% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 393.0 206.0 191% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97709923664 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 3.78020617076 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75546085726 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 127.690721649 182% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590330788804 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 290.88556701 205% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5717084631 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.714285714 76.5299724578 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0714285714 16.8248392259 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 4.34317383033 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135577386953 0.216113520407 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453850952089 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043397695557 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785587779852 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361372457149 0.0580467560999 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 8.37731958763 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 70.7449484536 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 7.45979381443 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 7.59969072165 122% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 41.2886597938 257% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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