Some individuals are of the opinion that the immigrants should adapt to the culture in the new country, while others claim that they should keep their traditions and live in a discrete minority group. Although both views possess a degree of accuracy, I endorse that the immigrants should integrate into foreign society and adapt to new cultures.
On the one hand, there are a variety of benefits of adapting to culture in foreign countries. Firstly, a person can avoid embarrassment and misunderstanding due to the difference in culture. For instance, in a Japanese house, the visitors should take off their shoes when entering or not point at people. Secondly, making local friends is a good idea to share the culture and enhance language skills. Moreover, interacting with local people is a valuable cultural exchange for both sides. The natives feel respected when the people understand their customs and the immigrants will overcome the culture shock and broaden the horizon.
On the other hand, there are still numerous advantages when living in a minority group. If a person remains his own customs and lives in a minority community, it will reduce homesickness. Besides, the minority community will make the foreign country more interesting and unique because of the mixture of cultures between Asia and the Western. For instance, Canada is a multicultural country made up of three national identities: Indigenous, French, and British. Moreover, this unique group will boost the tourism industry.
In conclusion, each country has its own beauty and culture. I believe that a person who moves into a new country should accept the culture, tradition, and beliefs.
- The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period 67
- Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals Others say that there are more important environmental problems Discuss both these views and give your opinion 3
- Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals Others say that there are more important environmental problems Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 73
- Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language Discuss both these views and give your ow 73
- Some people believe that hosting international sports events is good for the country while some people think it is bad Discuss both these views and state your opinion 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 428, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ry made up of three national identities: Indigenous, French, and British. Moreove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 32.9175257732 43% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 937.175257732 151% => OK
No of words: 269.0 206.0 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25278810409 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79799978702 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 127.690721649 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579925650558 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 443.7 290.88556701 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.971964392 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9333333333 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 4.34317383033 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307588072906 0.216113520407 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877848302292 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588931794441 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172546248792 0.12726935374 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313737258168 0.0580467560999 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 8.37731958763 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 41.2886597938 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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