In this day and age, the figure of populations has grown dramatically, including Western and Asian countries, young adults account for a large percentage compared to older people. I believe that the positive aspects outweigh the demerits.
On the one hand, there are many benefits of the rise of young adults. Firstly, it boosts economic development. The country has potential economic growth with a large number of youngsters who are energetic, creative, and enthusiastic. Moreover, young adults can have a wide range of soft skills for the modern workplace. They have connected and kept up to date with the technology, and they are active and not afraid of facing danger, so they tend to bring high productivity and innovation to the company and country.
On the other hand, it can be argued that the population with the majority of youngsters can put resolving careers and employment under pressure. Many old people already have a stable job, which leads to a lot of young adults, who have just graduated from the university, are still looking for a job. Besides that, some particular careers such as a doctor, engineers require experience and necessary skills which the old people have whereas young people do not have or have less valuable experiences. Furthermore, when the dramatic increase of young adults happens, it puts strain on education and health services, and available accommodation. For instance, the government can not afford medical treatment facilities or more scarcity of housing in most cases in many countries or food and other necessities would be much more expensive.
In conclusion, I endorse that the increase of young people can bring several merits to the companies and countries but there are significant points to consider.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ntry has potential economic growth with a large number of youngsters who are energetic, creative,...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... innovation to the company and country. On the other hand, it can be argued that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, still, thus, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83494006911 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589473684211 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6816946078 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2307692308 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219445812374 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069070900361 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586291985429 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132948233201 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497792997869 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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