Some individuals are of the opinion that the major environmental issue is the disappearance of plants and animals while others believe that there are more threat causes to the environment. This essay will be discussed from a different viewpoint.
First and foremost, a variety of species of animals and plants have come to extinction because wildlife habitats are being destroyed by illegal hunters and farmers. For the hunters, they have been hunting for rare animals for selling the merchants at a high price. For instance, the cheetah has been targeted to sell leathers in black markets. Besides that, forests are being cut down by the farmers to expand the agricultural land and giant cattle. As a result, this will lead to an uncontrollable increase in the number of extinction and the ecosystem face the verge of danger.
On the other hand, many people believe that other difficulties besides the disappearance of wildlife. This is caused by many factors such as air pollution. Air pollution is caused by the exhaust of car emissions, factories, dust. Moreover, air pollution can lead to the consequences is the poisonous atmosphere, thus, facing the risk of reduction in plants, trees, and forests. Besides that, fossil fuels like oil and gas are running out because of the excessive use of fuel and petrol, leading to raising the earth’s temperature and sea level rises which can be catastrophic for the world.
In conclusion, the extinction of wildlife and the loss of biodiversity are crucial issues. Nevertheless, other issues such as climate change or the run-out of fossil fuels are inevitable. In my opinion, we should have conclusions about all issues because they all threaten the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13261648746 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86117607664 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5014529683 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0680355086934 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0212194672501 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296960576585 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0467122868861 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283156615664 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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