A considerable number of people assert that it is fair to have earned a huge amount of money by champion sportsman than the others who hold equal or even more important professions. Others, on the other hand are vehement opponents of the aforementioned view claiming that the sportsperson are overrated and and overpaid. As far as I am concerned, the merits and the drawbacks of both views shall be pondered upon prior to advocating one.
On the one hand, people with more meaningful services which help the individuals and the society are paid much lesser. One well known example is that of a teacher. A teacher is someone who builds a base for every child in the society. Had there been no teacher, the child would not be able to bloom into a professional. The teacher is the most important job yet the most underpaid person. Due to low pay, the number of teachers are declining and it is harder to find people for such important jobs.
On the other hand, salary unfortunately does not always reflect the importance and necessity of a job. These successful athletes are parts of sports and entertainment industry which makes a lot of money and are a part of a big economy. There are millions of people who pay to watch sports and getting a share of profit by the sportsperson is not unjust. Also the career of these people are relatively shorter due to the constant competition. It is therefore, fair to earn more money in reasonably short period of time. Furthermore, people from entertainment industry are always paid a great deal of money. A sort of example that aptly illustrates my assertion has to do with the fact that actors and celebrities are the highly paid people on this planet. So, it is justifiable for athletes to earn more as they not only entertain people but also represent their countries and make them proud.
All in all I concede that despite the fact that they earn more money than what they deserve unlike other professionals who actually do, I believe that it is only justifiable that they earn a hefty sum of money as their career is short lived and are still more deserving than movie stars.
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- Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. 93
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...ing that the sportsperson are overrated and and overpaid. As far as I am concerned, the...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ofit by the sportsperson is not unjust. Also the career of these people are relative...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... to earn more money in reasonably short period of time. Furthermore, people from entertainment...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...s justifiable for athletes to earn more as they not only entertain people but also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, well, as to, sort of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 7.48453608247 321% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 5.05154639175 297% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 3.03092783505 495% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 937.175257732 187% => OK
No of words: 375.0 206.0 182% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 3.78020617076 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7058139872 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 127.690721649 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522666666667 0.622605031667 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 290.88556701 191% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 7.0 0.824742268041 849% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6423994725 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300801206402 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079997679231 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554958293543 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170581914084 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069782376191 0.0580467560999 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 41.2886597938 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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