While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it.Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain- what happened- apologize for the accident- tell your friend how

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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it.
Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain
- what happened
- apologize for the accident
- tell your friend how you plan to make it up to him

Dear Friend,

I hope this finds you well.

Thank you very much for giving me keys to your apartment while you were away on vacations. I stayed there for 10 days. It was very comfortable and I felt like I was at my own home. There was this beautiful crystal bowl decorated right besides TV trolley. Looks of bowl were so catchy that it stuck in my eyes. Immediately, I moved near bowl to have a closer look and carry it in my hands. However, this sudden movement resulted in change in blood flow and I felt dizzy for a moment. The very same moment, bowl fell down from my hands and it shattered into pieces.

I am very sad on this incident and have no words to explain my embarrasement. I am very sorry for this loss. I know the bowl was very expensive and I am sincerely appologizing for the accident.

Despite the fact that I have replaced it with a beautiful vase, I still want to make it up for dropping that bowl. For this reason, I have arranged for a picnic. Venue for picnic is a Lake located in outskirts of this city. Map of location is enclosed with this letter. I have arranged for lunch followed by a music programme. I hope to see you at the lake this weekend.

Kindly accept my apology and hope to see you this weekend.

Sincerely,
MM

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...asement. I am very sorry for this loss. I know the bowl was very expensive and I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, look, so, still, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 32.9175257732 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1031.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 238.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33193277311 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42812432278 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554621848739 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.9 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6804123711 150% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2781280168 44.8134815571 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.2631578947 76.5299724578 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.5263157895 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63157894737 4.34317383033 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207660124838 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619911887774 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666111473405 0.0603063233224 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102788324391 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401859731111 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 8.37731958763 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.95 8.71597938144 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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