Write a letter to a friend You borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged Apologize for damaging the product Explain what happened Say how you are going to fix it

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a friend. You borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged.
• Apologize for damaging the product
• Explain what happened
• Say how you are going to fix it

Hello Jude,

I’m sorry I haven’t returned the X-Box game you borrowed me three weeks ago. The battery got bad few days after I collected it.

I know you warned me to ensure nothing happens to the game but I have failed you in that aspect. Please accept my sincere apology and hope you don’t hold it against me.

It happened on 7th of May when I and my colleagues were playing PES 2020. I didn’t know my sibling transferred the power surge arrestor connected to the game to another device. The moment the rain started, there was an unusual voltage fluctuation which affected the game’s battery.

Fortunately for me, John, a game technician is my next door neighbor and I’ve given the game to him to repair. He specializes in battery components and has promised to get it fixed before weekend. In addition, this comes with a two year warranty period.

Be rest assured you will have your game in good condition come Thursday next week.

Cheers,

Azuka.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82840236686 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45238968937 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.733727810651 0.622605031667 118% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.329509216 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.1818181818 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3636363636 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 4.34317383033 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129922447015 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438263253453 0.0766984524023 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449441001082 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076458139115 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498535593895 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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