Write a letter to the shop you bought an equipment that you use for your jobin your letterdescribe the problems with the equipmentexplain how his problem is affecting your worksay what you want the shop or company to do

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Write a letter to the shop you bought an equipment that you use for your job
in your letter
describe the problems with the equipment
explain how his problem is affecting your work
say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you about the problems with the laptop I bought from your shop last month.

After I turned on the device, I realized there is a problem with wifi network adaptor, which makes it impossible to connect to the internet by it. Moreover, the screen of the device goes black after half an hour. I called your customer service, and they told me try upgrading the OS, which I did but did not seem to to solve the problems.

I am very interested by these problems, especially since I intended to use it everyday for my work. I used to go online and watch related movies in order to update m knowledge regarding new inventions and innovations in my field of expertise. Since buying this laptop, I have been unable to do so.

Although I tried to reach out to your customer service to fix the device, not only did not their solution work, but they did not send one to fix to device. I ask your shop tp either change the device for me with a new one or a complete refund.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Faithfully,
Aidin Farughi

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ng the OS, which I did but did not seem to to solve the problems. I am very intere...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
..., especially since I intended to use it everyday for my work. I used to go online and wa...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ntended to use it everyday for my work. I used to go online and watch related mov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39800995025 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40179507632 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641791044776 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4526960859 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3636363636 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45454545455 4.34317383033 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269714465171 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930558250705 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888926191507 0.0603063233224 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152327409146 0.12726935374 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119346509241 0.0580467560999 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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