Write a letter to your friend. You have borrowed something from your friend, and it got damaged.
1. Apologise to the damage
2. Explain what happened
3. How you are going to fix the issue.
Dear Annie
I’m just write to tell you about an unexpected damage to your laptop that I borrowed from you last week.
I really appreciate your kindness for letting me use your laptop for 2 weeks when I needed it to complete my dissertation. I am very sorry for this incident and hope you would forgive me.
Last Friday, I used the device during a lecture at Swinburne University. I had to give a presentation on the stage whilst the laptop was placed on the table. Once I completed the speech, I came back to the seat and was shock to recognise that your laptop dropped. I checked straight away, everything was still working fine, but there was a long crack on the screen.
I brought it to a laptop repair store to fix it, then fortunately the repairer said he can replace the screen by a brand-new one. Certainly, he promised that I can get it back by Sunday next week. I will return it to you as soon as I receive it. I wish you would accept my apology.
All the best.
Nam
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'unexpected damage'.
Suggestion: unexpected damage
... I'm just write to tell you about an unexpected damage to your laptop that I borrowed from you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, really, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 814.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49376139053 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637837837838 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3341194881 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8333333333 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4166666667 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 4.34317383033 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161234166558 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052425883783 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652191513 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11279026345 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838987807204 0.0580467560999 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 8.71597938144 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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