Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say.
. Describe the problem
. How it is affecting your work
. What need to be done about it
Dear Mr. Anderson,
I am akash chokshi- a business analyst working in the Information Technology department. I am writing this letter to draw your attention about a pelicular computer problem I am facing.
operating system of my laptop is still windows xp and all the programs that are essential for my optimal work runs quite slow on it. Because all the softwares that our firm use are compatible, of course, at some extent and hence the operating system crashes in the middle of m,y work. As I work as liaison between stakeholders and quality control department, I have to stay online to provide unimpeded work and with such age old system, it is utmost difficult task for me to accomplish.
I suppose updating the overall system by technician might ameliorate the situation. If not, then replacing the computer with a newer version can resolve the issue completely. I hope you will take this matter seriously and provide me a permenant solution as soon as possible.
Thank you for your kind attention.
Yours sincerely,
akash chokshi
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-05-18 | aakash chokshi | 78 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Anderson, I am akash chokshi- a business analyst w...
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Suggestion:
...icular computer problem I am facing. operating system of my laptop is still w...
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Suggestion: Operating
...facing. operating system of my laptop is still windows xp...
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Suggestion: , y
...rating system crashes in the middle of m,y work. As I work as liaison between stak...
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...difficult task for me to accomplish. I suppose updating the overall system by...
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...ermenant solution as soon as possible. Thank you fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, still, then, i suppose, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02285714286 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78992941173 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.702857142857 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5746911236 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 4.34317383033 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228661217732 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809038171525 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753678194578 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124361149002 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631966678252 0.0580467560999 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 7.59969072165 122% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.