Write a letter to your manager about your work from last year Include What you did What you think you could improve A training request

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your manager about your work from last year. Include
• What you did
• What you think you could improve
• A training request

Dear Mr.Hasani,
I am writing with regard to my performance during last year, and I wonder if you could accept my request for a training course.
As you know, last year, I launched a new project which aimed to develop some novel and modern type of coating for our products. According to the obtained results, among those experimented methods, one of them was the most practical and effective way with many appropriate results.

In order to develop this method, I believe we should do more research and arrange other experiments such as evaluating the function of the coating during service.
Following this, I noticed that there is a 10-days course which is going to be held next month. The teacher of this course would be Professor Arabi, who has a great reputation for high-temperature coatings, and I think this is a valuable opportunity to gain a deep insight into this subject.

I suggest you thinking about this course, and if it is possible, doing the arrangement for enrollment.

Thank you for your time and consideration.
Yours Sincerely,
Yalda Asgari.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hasani
Dear Mr.Hasani, I am writing with regard to my perfo...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me and consideration. Yours Sincerely, Yalda Asgari.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, i think, such as, you know, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03351955307 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8717366168 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.687150837989 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.447444117 44.8134815571 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202450963781 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918477475114 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863962358269 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117068108553 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920637965461 0.0580467560999 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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