You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker, andGive your reason

Dear Mr Walker,

The purpose of writing this epistle is to apply for a designation of "Quality Assurance Manager" in your esteem organization. I receive acknowledgement about this post from university's notice board this morning and excited about this eminent role.

I am a final year student of Loren Brusque University and pursuing Masters in Business Administration, I have distinctions up till now in my academics, apart from good rankings I also have valuable internships in my bag. I worked as a Junior Quality Analyst in Bosh Motors, before that during my Bachelors in Business Administration I spent six months internship as Quality Assistant in Paramount Motors LTD. I think I am eligible for this new dimension of responsibility now.

During my internship, I also got the opportunity to learn new technical aspects of quality management like CAD/CAM , Dimensional designing and Data report generating for the actual results. I got appreciated many times for my diligence and new ideas. I have some interesting and creative ways for progressive productivity, that I would like to implement if a chance is provided. Therefore, I am attaching my academic records, certificates and internship experince letters with this missive.

Hoping an optimistic response from your side sir.

Yours sincerely,
ABC

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Average: 5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...so have valuable internships in my bag. I worked as a Junior Quality Analyst in B...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lity Assistant in Paramount Motors LTD. I think I am eligible for this new dimens...
^
Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pects of quality management like CAD/CAM , Dimensional designing and Data report g...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, apart from, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1134.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50485436893 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35546806097 2.54303337028 132% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.669902912621 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.41237113402 127% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6221490716 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.090909091 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204005901257 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688204930701 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595001806489 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991446069129 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528751012284 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 70.7449484536 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 8.71597938144 168% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.28 7.59969072165 135% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.