You are going to aboard for study. You would like to do a part time job over there while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Give details of your study plans. Explain why you want to get a part time job. Suggest how

Dear Ayza,
Hope this letter finds you in the radiant health and best spirits. I will writing this letter just to inform you next month I will come to Canada because the university of Toronto have given me approval for masters in mass communication.

You know that, mass communication is very vast feild. I should required more money to get further courses and it is really unafforable for me right now, thats why I need part time job. Furthermore, I also need accomadation to live in Canada country.

You are living in Canada after along time and you know native people there. Even I hear that Canada is easily provide a part time job to many people in the form of libaray incharge, hotel assistance employee etc. If you can help me. So, I would be thankful to you.

You can contact me my personal number 0023456789.

Waiting for your postive response.

Yours sincerely,
Sana

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 75, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'write'
Suggestion: write
...radiant health and best spirits. I will writing this letter just to inform you next mon...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... month I will come to Canada because the university of Toronto have given me appr...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...is really unafforable for me right now, thats why I need part time job. Furthermore, ...
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Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...able for me right now, thats why I need part time job. Furthermore, I also need accomadat...
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Line 6, column 32, Rule ID: ALONG_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a long time'?
Suggestion: a long time
...ntry. You are living in Canada after along time and you know native people there. Even ...
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Line 6, column 111, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...here. Even I hear that Canada is easily provide a part time job to many people in the f...
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Line 6, column 121, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... I hear that Canada is easily provide a part time job to many people in the form of libar...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, really, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 740.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 155.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77419354839 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53815012073 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.703225806452 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1643108952 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.6666666667 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9166666667 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370284498566 0.216113520407 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133661048025 0.0766984524023 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768898725146 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178373392391 0.12726935374 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926710978218 0.0580467560999 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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