You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to this friend In your letter Give details of your study plans Explain w

Hi Jim,

Hope this letter finds you well. I'm writing to tell you I got the master offer from XXX University finally, majoring in data science. We will meet soon, and I would like you to introduce me some part-time jobs related to data analytics.

I like this major, one of the most popular disciplines in this University. Meanwhile, in order to get a full time job after my graduation, I need to do some related work in this filed. By the interantional students regulation, I could not get paid from jobs, thus can you introduce me some kind of work? First, without payment, I think more groups would like to hire me to do some basic missions. Since the initial work in data science is full of data cleanings and preprocessing which are simple but feeble. Additionally , online projects are also feasible to me.

Hoping I can get you there fast, I'm looking forward your reply.

Sincerely,
Tony

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...im, Hope this letter finds you well. Im writing to tell you I got the master of...
^^
Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...niversity. Meanwhile, in order to get a full time job after my graduation, I need to do s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hich are simple but feeble. Additionally , online projects are also feasible to me...
^^
Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...me. Hoping I can get you there fast, Im looking forward your reply. Sincerel...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, look, so, thus, well, while, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70440251572 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64264900242 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679245283019 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.171347301 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8 76.5299724578 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 4.34317383033 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24683093146 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871200577799 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682096830748 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180790760492 0.12726935374 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659207863273 0.0580467560999 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.